Comments on: Kitten Terror

By: Bad Sheep

Bad Sheep — Tue, 12 Aug 2008 01:51:02 +0000

My two kitties won over Indy. He was always a dog person but luckily, my cat’s craziness rubbed off on him and he loves them. At least he does when I home.

By: Rick

Rick — Tue, 29 Jul 2008 07:48:09 +0000

I think it has something to do with my love for “Ye olde English”. I’m forever reading Shakespeare, Chaucer, Yeats, Wordsworth and Byron.

Shakespeare once wrote:

Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day?
Thou art more lovely and more temperate;

Perhaps I’m just romanticizing the past but doesn’t old English seem more poetic. I can still imagine this sentence hitting the hearts of many a buxom wench even today.

I once wrote this to a girl:

If you asked me to describe beauty it would be easy
For all I would do is describe you.

For some reason this has not the same poetic feel to me.

But anyway, after reading your comments I think you are right, I don’t think your poem lends itself to the word whilst, unless changed

By: Darvin

Darvin — Mon, 28 Jul 2008 13:50:45 +0000

My wife had 1 20 year old cat when we moved in together. The cat has always loved me since we have been dating.

Then we (my wife) decided we wanted a pet bunny. (i take care of it pretty much).

Then she wanted a second kitty. The kitty is the most ornery thing ever. I love this kitteh too. It seems to cling to me all day.

Then we took in a little dog that needed a home.

I am wondering what we are going to get next.

By: Kim

Kim — Mon, 28 Jul 2008 04:25:19 +0000

Ah, yes, the joys of trying to combine two persons into one household. At least the cats are the point of contention. He’ll get used to them.

By: lore

lore — Sat, 26 Jul 2008 14:39:10 +0000

Rick - Thank you for the suggestions. It made me laugh about the second one with the word “whilst”. The book tells us to avoid language that seems “poetic” as it is a sure sign of falling down unless you can use it in an effective way. I don’t think it would work in this poem without several words being manipulated as such… it kind of loses its meaning to me at least.

Darvin - Actually, no… I haven’t been watching a lot of tv as of late.

Breeze - You know it!